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Sun, Apr. 27th, 2008, 03:21 pm
xdawnfirex: *pokes the comm*

Title: "Once Upon a Story"
Perpetrator: Something calling itself hhsprincess

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4201408/1/once_upon_a_story

What It's Claiming to be: Tony/Abby Romance

What It Actually Is: I'll quote the most honest review: "Painful to read. More like an incredably [sic] crappy story outline that a retarded 4 year old would be ashamed of."

Choice Highlights: Highlights? The entire fricking story is nothing BUT highlights. Check this: Before getting up to there floors the kiss but this time was different the elevator stopped at a floor and in mid kiss Gibbs and the director walks in to the elevator and they both freak out because there is a rule with no dating between co workers.

Jumped up Christ, whatever happened to punctuation? Or spelling? Or, I dunno, talent. Jesus, just because you have access to fanfiction.net doesn't make you an author.

Evilness Rating: Only two or three - mercifully, there were only four more sentences to that "story" besides the one I just posted. Of course, one of those sentences has a period in the middle of it... WHY GOD WHY?????

Mon, Apr. 28th, 2008 07:44 am (UTC)
emstapole

about 10 and the number kept coming up private. He ignored because he did not know the number

So, ten what?
And if it comes up private, how does he know that he doesn't know the number?

Anyone else having flashbacks to when you played that game where you start with one word then everyone else adds one on and it goes completely haywire?

And its THERE. There's a second "e" in There. Ther is like... Thor but not. You can spell "There" when it's meant to be "their" but not when it's meant to be "there"?

Oh dear god. There's a sequel. (Abby has apparently grown, since she can hold onto a two year old, one year old twins and a one month old...)